Drafting and planning: Feedback from pitch

Feedback from the trailer pitch:

After doing my pitch to the class, the class and my teacher all gave me feedback on what they thought of my idea with them talking about the positives and how maybe i could improve my idea so that i create the best trailer that i can. What i was most proud of from the pitch was that my target audience seemed to like the idea calling it a 'unique and original' idea which is something i am very happy about as it only means that i am on the right tracks.

Positive feedback that i received:

• "Idea is unique and original and shows you know your narrative inside out".
• "Good connection between the use of the props and the plot"- (masks)
• "A really compelling idea"
• "Very relevant and relates to the genre of horror and thriller"

These being just some of the positives i got from the pitch i was really happy as it meant that clearly i am doing something good and i am on the right tracks and gave me an insight. As well as receiving those positives i got some feedback which will only act to help me and that was feedback in how i could possibly make the trailer better.

Feedback for how to improve my trailer:

• "How will i show that that the trailer takes place in the future"
• "Alot of content, could be simpler"
• "How can you match the montage scenes could relate to the story"
• "Will the location all be shot indoors"

The main comment that i received from my peers is how i would be able to create the trailer in a futuristic sense considering i said that my film would take place in the year 2050. As this comment came up several times i did realise that it would be quite unrealistic for the plot to be set in this time frame as it would be easier to do just do it in the current time frame.

Now that i have received this feedback from my peers i can begin to start the processing of filming now that i have a much clearer idea on how my trailer will come together.